»My short comedic story about life and stuff.«
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 once upon a time*falls asleep* sorry about that lets start over once there was an evil dictator who hated everyone. he only liked one thing. rainbows. there were not enough rainbows so he kidnapped 10 iof the smartest scientists in the world to make a rainbow machine. they achived the goal and all got to see the rainbows. they were all happy. until they found out that the dictator was going to kill all of them for making the machine. he wanted to be the only one who knew about it. so they all ran. he hunted them for years. they hid the machine and the man died lonly and sad. they all danced on his grave. The End. posted by Agent Zero |
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| in-my-opinion.orgFun and Weirdness and GamingJokes, Fun, Riddles, Shocking, Nonsensemy short comedic story about life and stuff. |
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 That story has some potential posted by knn |
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yah i just felt like being wierd. it does doesnt it! posted by Agent Zero |
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 That story does have some potential indeed. The idea with the rainbows is really good. Though the story to me doesn't look weird, it looks sad. Someone very unhappy who wants to be independent of all the rest. Maybe you could do something to the middle part, about them all run and him hunting them for years. Feels like there's something else that could be added. posted by mymla |
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i guess so, but he deserved it! posted by Agent Zero |
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